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 This all but confirmed Raven's suspicions. "Metal Raven," she says. The light of the emeralds reveals a shiny metallic face staring back at her, a face that looked similar to her own. The twisted grin on its face was something she thought a robot wasn't capable of.
-"What are you doing here? Where even is here?" Metal Raven ignores her questions, placing the emeralds back in the bag. "The Sol Emeralds could be of some use yet, even just these five. We can use their energy to amplify the Shoten crystal."
+"What are you doing here? Where even is here?" Raven asks. Metal Raven ignores her questions, placing the emeralds back in the bag. "The Sol Emeralds could be of some use yet, even just these five. We can use their energy to amplify the Shoten crystal."
 "Shoten... crystal?" A loud rumbling occurs that shakes the entire cave. A cold, emotionless voice comes from the darkness nearby. "Metal Raven, I've secured another prisoner. But my sensors show massive volcanic activity is starting. We may want to leave soon." Frankie appears out of the darkness, being thrown to the ground by the unknown figure.
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 "Aw, poor little Frances the Bat wants to stop me!" Mist says mockingly. "What are you going to do about it?" Raven looks around and notices the familiar ears of Vultro in the corner of the room. She stares through the darkness at him.
-"Whoa! A metal clone of Raven?" he bursts out. "I thought she was making that up." Metal Raven's head snapped towards him. He looks over at the bag in her hands and notices an unfamiliar object poking out of it. It appears to be a lime-green crystal, with a webbing of blue cracks running through it. "What's that thing," he says quietly. "I've never seen a gem like that before."
+"Whoa! A metal clone of Raven?" he bursts out. "I thought she was making that up." Raven sighed. ''Here we go again,'' she thought. Metal Raven's head snapped towards him. He looks over at the bag in her hands and notices an unfamiliar object poking out of it. It appears to be a lime-green crystal, with a webbing of blue cracks running through it. "Say, what's that thing?" he asks. "I've never seen a gem like that before."
-Mist chuckles to himself, stepping forward into the dim light. He reveals himself to be a strange, featureless creature with pale grey skin. Even without visible eyes on his face, Vultro could tell he was staring right at him. "Do you really think we'd tell you anything about that crystal?" He pauses and attempts what Vultro assumes is a smile. "You should have heard your friend outside."
+Mist chuckles to himself, stepping forward into the dim light. He reveals himself to be a strange, featureless creature with pale grey skin. Even without visible eyes on his face, Vultro could tell Mist was staring right at him. "Do you really think we'd tell you anything about that crystal?" He pauses and attempts what Vultro assumes is a smile. "You should have heard your friend outside."
-The creature morphs into an exact copy of Tracker, down to his dripping yellow ears. "Gimme our bloody friends back before I get rate maaaaad!" he says as he poorly mimicks Tracker's accent. Mist laughs to himself. Vultro's eye begins to twitch in anger.
+The creature morphs into an exact copy of Tracker, down to his dripping yellow ears. "Gimme our bloody friends back before I get rate maaaaad!" he says as he poorly mimics Tracker's accent. Mist laughs to himself. Vultro's eye begins to twitch in anger.
-Metal Raven stifles a laugh. Mist looks up at Metal Raven, and pauses. "Raven! Behind you!" Jenny flips over Metal Raven's shoulder, and swiftly snatches the mysterious crystal from Raven's bag. "How dare you make fun of my friend like that!" Jenny says. Metal Raven growls and dives towards Jenny. She quickly tosses the crystal to Vultro.
+Metal Raven stifles a laugh. Mist looks up at Metal Raven, and pauses. "Metal Raven! Behind you!" Jenny flips over Metal Raven's shoulder, and swiftly snatches the mysterious crystal from Raven's bag. "How dare you make fun of my friend like that!" Jenny says. Metal Raven growls and dives towards Jenny. "Vultro, catch!" She quickly tosses the crystal towards Vultro.
-As Vultro looks down at it, still angry, it begins to glow green. He begins to feel a surge of energy enter his body. "What's happening?" he asks as he feels more and more energy flow through him. Suddenly, a brilliant flash fills the cave, sending a shockwave through the room. As the light fades, Vultro is now floating in the air, his fur a shining purple color.
+Vultro jumps and catches the gem out of the air. As he looks down at it in his hands, still angry, it begins to glow green. He begins to feel a surge of energy enter his body. "What's happening?" he asks as he feels more and more energy flow through him. Suddenly, a brilliant flash fills the cave, sending a shockwave through the room. As the light fades, Vultro is now floating in the air, his fur a shining purple color.
 He looks down in awe at his transformation and then looks back at the crystal with a big smile on his face. "Guys! Guys! I'm just like Super Sonic! Ha ha, look at me! I look awesome!" He turns around, only to be met by a sucker punch straight to the gut. "Not quite Super Sonic, foolish child," a menacing voice says as he falls to the floor.
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 Vultro drops the crystal, and his fur fades back to normal color. The mysterious figure picks up the crystal and inspects it, and Vultro looks up at him. The figure appears to have both the angular face of a wolf, and the distinct large ears of a fox. He stood as tall as Raven, with a mixture of brown and gray fur.
-As Vultro looks at him longer, he also notices that he is translucent, and his feet hovered slightly off the ground. "Gah, I almost went mad without this on me. Makes me wonder how I went so long without it." Metal Raven hands over the yellow Sol emerald to him, and he inserts it into a device on his belt.
+As Vultro looks at him longer, he also notices that he is translucent, and his feet hovered slightly off the ground. "Gah, I almost went mad without this on me. Makes me wonder how I went so long without it." He turned to Metal Raven and gave her a nod. She walks over and hands the yellow Sol emerald to him, and he inserts it into a device on his belt.
 Jenny, off to the side of the room, suddenly gets a tap on her shoulder. She spins around to see Wreck standing next to her. He signals her to stay quiet, and she nods as he tiptoes towards Mist. He glances at Jenny and gives her a signal. He suddenly dashes towards Mist, and Jenny dives towards him as well. Mist turns to block Jenny, and Wreck gets behind him to sweep his legs out from under him.
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 Wreck then turns to the wolf. "You want some too?" He throws a punch at the wolf, only for his hand to go right through him as he tumbles to the floor. "No use," the wolf says as he grabs Vultro by the neck. He taps the device on his belt and the two instantly vanish in a flash of yellow light. Metal Raven turns and grabs Raven, and they too disappear in a flash of light.
-"Raven!" Jenny yelled. "They have Raven, and Vultro, and the emeralds," Wreck says. He turns his attention to Frankie, who is still collapsed on the floor. "Wreck? Wreck!" Cyncatia's voice echoes. She stumbles into the room, out of breath. "What happened?"
+"Raven!" Jenny yelled. "They have Raven, and Vultro, and the emeralds," Wreck says. He clenches his fists and turns to Mist, but by now he had already escaped. He turns his attention to Frankie, who is still collapsed on the floor. "Wreck? Wreck!" Cyncatia's voice echoes. She stumbles into the room, out of breath. "What happened?"
 "Raven and Vultro were taken, and maybe Tracker too," Jenny said. "I don't know." "We have to get out of this cave," Wreck says as he begins to untie Frankie. "It's okay Frankie, you're safe now."