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 RavenCool: Yeah, I don't need a furious cat on my tail about those when I get home. Hey, wheres Lighting?
-Frankie: He was captured too. I couldn't see by who, though.
+Frankie: He was captured too. I couldn't see by who, though...
 RavenCool: I heard someone that sounded like Metal Silver when me and Vultro was captured, and I heard what sounded like the roar of a dragon right as we arrived here..... *sad* Lighting......
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 Wreck: (breaks free and looks at Metal Silver) Hey wait… I know you...
-Metal Silver: *warps away*
+Metal Silver: *warps behind Frankie*
-Frankie: (from behind the group) Wreck! Help me! *gets carried away by an unknown figure*
+Frankie: Wreck! Help me!
 Wreck: '''''FRANKIE! ''[[NO!]]'''
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 Penelope: Lets keep searching. I hope there is more life on this planet than just us.
-RavenCool: *growls at the two hedgehogs and draws her sword* Give me that Sol Emerald now! * has her Sol Emerald ready to use chaos powers*
+RavenCool: *growls* Give me that Sol Emerald now!
-Shimmer: Why should I? I need these emeralds to create my ultra super form to defeat my enemies. Besides, I found it fair and square.
+Shimmer: Why should I? I need these emeralds to harness the power of the Sol dimension. ''Besides'', I found it fair and square.
-RavenCool: I have to protect them! I am the guardian of the Sol dimension! You want me to tell Blaze you toke them?! Both of us will end up burnt to a crisp!
+RavenCool: Sol dimension? I'm the ''guardian'' of the Sol dimension! You want me to tell Blaze you stole them?! Both of us will end up burnt to a crisp!
-Penelope: First of all, Shimm didn't take them, he ''found'' them. And we can loan it to you, ''if'' we team up to stop the villians and get the rest of the Emeralds. Deal? *puts out her hand to shake*
+Penelope: First of all, Shimm didn't steal them, he ''found'' them. And we can loan it to you, ''if'' we team up to stop the villains and get the rest of the emeralds. Deal? *puts out her hand to shake*
-RavenCool: *shakes Penelope's hand* Fine.
+RavenCool: *reluctantly shakes* Fine.
 Shimmer: When we need it, you'll give it back. Understand? *gives RavenCool the Red Sol Emerald*
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 Penelope: Hi Vultro! *smiles and giggles*
-Vultro *shaking Shimmer's hand* We've lost our friend, a bat named Frankie, to one of the villains. There's also a bunch of us unaccounted for. Want to help us find everyone?
+Vultro *shaking Shimmer's hand* We've lost our friend, a bat named Frankie, to one of the villains. There's also a bunch more of us unaccounted for. Want to help us find everyone?
 Shimmer: I guess, sure!
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 Shimmer: Hmmm. Yes, let's. *follows RavenCool too*
-Vultro: RavenCool... should we split up? I really think Spark might deserve another chance.
+Vultro: Wait RavenCool... should we split up? What if Spark is on to something.
-RavenCool: *nods, but starts to follow the smell of a dragon/hedgehog* Shh! It's right on the tip of my nose...
+RavenCool: *nods, but starts to catch the smell of a dragon/hedgehog* Shh! It's right on the tip of my nose...
-Spark: Well guys, I smell cat. I think it might be someone I know as an enemy, it's NOT a friendly smell.
+Spark: I smell a cat. It might be someone I know as an enemy, it's NOT a friendly smell.
-RavenCool: ''I'' smell a were-hog. That would be Lighting.
+RavenCool: Well Spark, ''I'' smell a were-hog. That would be Lighting.
 Shimmer: You guys are both good at smelling.
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 Vultro: Spark? What direction is that cat smell coming from?
-RavenCool: The one I smelled is coming from the west.
+Spark: The one I smell is coming from the northeast!
-Spark: Well the one ''I'' smell is coming from the northeast!
+RavenCool: Well the one ''I'' smell is coming from the west.
 Tailsalyn: Hello, Whatcha doin'?
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 RavenCool: I don't think anyone understood that.
-Terry: Weeeere looookiiin furrrrrr aaaaaah buuuuuunch ooovvvvv baaaahd giiieeeez weeeeeth aaaaaaaaah buuuuunch oooooov owuuurrr maaaaytes, aaaaand suuuuuuum geeeeeemmyy thiiiiiiiiiinks.
 Wreck: ...we are looking for our friends. And my girlfriend. AND a very powerful gemstone. Excuse the beaver.
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 RavenCool: *continues sniffing*
-Wreck: What ya smellin' this time? An 8-legged cake? Because you could smell that.
+Wreck: What ya smellin' this time? An cake with legs? Becaus I bet you could smell that.
-RavenCool: *following the smell* I know it's Mobian, I just can't tell what kind.
+RavenCool: *following the smell* Shh... I know it's Mobian, I just can't tell what kind.
-Terry: What happened to being able to specifically make out a were-dragon hedgehog by smell?
+Terry: What 'appened to being able to make out a were-dragon hedgehog by smell?
 Wreck: *mumbles* Shuddup, Terry. Follow the scent, Raven!
-RavenCool: There's a hundred and one scents around me ten times stronger that aren't Lightning, ok? Geez. *keeps following the scent*
+RavenCool: There's a million and one scents around me ten times stronger that aren't Lightning, ok? Geez. *keeps following the scent*
 Terry: Sorrehhh.
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+(a faint rumbling is heard behind Wreck)
 Wreck: Who's there?
-*Darkness bursts out of the ground*
+(Suddenly, a menacing figure bursts out of the ground)
-???: MWAHAHAHAHA HARGHGHA *Cough cough*
+???: MWAHAHAHAHA! HARGH-- *Cough cough*
 Wreck: No…not you…that is not possible!
-RavenCool: What do we have here? A sick Mephiles?
+RavenCool: Looks like my history teacher, maybe just a tad less evil though.
 Wreck: No… it's-
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 ???: LORD POVENKIOS!!
-Wreck: You're supposed to be dead! I pratically killed you last month!
+Wreck: I killed you. How is this possible?
+Povenkios: IT'S NOT FOR YOU TO KNOW, FURBALL. MR. DARKMALL, I REQUIRE YOU AT ONCE!!
+(Darkmall emerges from behind a nearby tree)
+Povenkios: GRAHAHAHAHARGHGA *cough* (burrows back into the ground)
+Wreck: Darkmall! TELL. ME. HOW!!!
+Darkmall: You're gonna have to pry that information from my cold, dead paws.
+RavenCool: Galdly.
+RavenCool roars loudly, pouncing towards Darkmall. Darkmall grabs her by the throat, then choke slams her down into the dirt.
+Vultro: Gaaah, you'll pay for that!!
-Povenkios: Well.…Things happen. I was brought back.
+Vultro glances at Wreck, who nods approvingly. Vultro darts between Darkmall's legs. As Darkmall tries to find him, Vultro chomps down as hard as he can on the back of Darkmall's ankle.
-Wreck: By who?
+Darkmall: GAAAAHHHH! You annoying pest!!
-Povenkios: WELL, IT'S NOT FOR YOU TO KNOW. DARKMALL!!
+(Wreck, now behind Darkmall, punches him directly in the back as he is distracted.)
-Wreck: BY WHO?!
+Darkmall: AAAHHH!
-Povenkios: GRAHAHAHAHARGHGA *cough* *disappears*
+Darkmall angrily kicks Vultro off, sending him tumbling into the dirt. He then elbows Wreck, and sweeps his legs out from under him.
-Darkmall: *appears* You'll never get him, ya know. Especially with who we have now.
+Shimmer: Penny, we need to do something!
-Wreck: TELL ME WHO!!!
+Penelope: Shimm, we're not fighters, you know that!
-Darkmall: Only if you beat the crap outta me.
+Suddenly a spiked chain flies into Darkmall's neck, as it begins to spark and electrocute him. Darkmall grunts and falls to his knees. In jumps a slender, orange cat wearing some kind of high tech armor.
-RavenCool: Galdly. *attacks Darkmall*
+???: The name's Sico. You folks in trouble?
-Sico:*jumps out of nowhere and electrocutes darkmall*the name's sico.
+Darkmall: *Lifts up head* I…am not…the kind of guy…who falls-- *bzzp* WHO FALLS IN ONE HIT!!!
-(I think Sico goes in the "met on the planet" group of characters. Just wanted to say that. ~ RavenCool)
+Darkmall grabs the spiked chain, yanking it out of his neck. Without any hesitation, he turns and points his hands at Sico.
-(Sorry I ''had'' to correct the grammar issues lol [[User:The Evilbreaker|SUPER GREEN POWERS]] ([[User talk:The Evilbreaker|talk]]) 22:00, February 4, 2014 (UTC))
+Darkmall: LAYLO AKRANNA!
-Darkmall: *Covered in ash and sparking* *Lifts up head* I…am not…the kind of guy…who falls *bzzp* FOR A ONE HIT KILL!!! LALO AKRAN!
+Sico is hit by a purple blast of magic, knocking him down off of his feet.
-*Spell hits Sico*
+Darkmall: DIVINE... SOLSTICE!
-Wreck: *Fires metal at Darkmall*
+(Darkmall disappears in a flash of green light)
-Darkmall: *Deflects with a spell*
+RavenCool: Great. He must be working with the others, he has one of the Sol Emeralds too.
-RavenCool: *dashes to attack Darkmall, but gets attacked by Metal Silver* Again with you? I thought Iblis melted you.
+(RavenCool helps Vultro and Sico back onto their feet. Shimmer and Penelope manage to get Wreck up as well. RavenCool kneels down next to Vultro with a concerned look on her face.)
-Metal Silver: I WAS MADE WITH LAVA PROOF METAL THIS TIME. PERPARE TO BE TAKEN TO YOUR NEW MASTER.
+RavenCool: Hey buddy... are you okay? Please be okay.
-RavenCool: I guess they couldn't update your voice chip when you got rebuilt.
+Vultro: Yes... Raven... I'm fine. Sico, is it?
-Wreck: YOU DAMNED RETARD YOU!!! GIVE ME BACK FRANKIE RIGHT THIS VERY MINUTE, OR YOU WILL WISH YOU'D NEVER BEEN REBUILT AT ALL!!!
+(Vultro reaches his hand out to shake Sico's)
-Metal Silver: WHY DO YOU THINK I'M THE ONE WHO TOOK HER? I WAS TOLD TO ATTACK YOU. METAL RAVENCOOL WAS THE ONE WHO TOOK YOUR FRIEND.
+Vultro: We're trying to stop a bunch of bad guys who stole some very powerful gems and kidnapped our friends. We could use all the help we can get.
-RavenCool: Again, they couldn't update this guy's voice chip?
+Sico: I'm sorry, but I have my own problems to deal with right now. I wish I could help, but I can't. I wish you all the best of luck, though. Nice meeting you Vultro.
-Wreck: I'LL ''KNOCK'' THE VOICE BACK INTO HIM!! *attempts to attack metal silver*
+(Sico darts off into the forest.)
-Metal Silver: *holds Wreck in the air* Can't hit me, I'm a robot Silver! *for some reason, gets his new voice chip to turn on*
+Wreck: I can't believe this is happening.
 ==The Great Reboot==